Now this one is for a competition being organized by my friend. I had self-doubt if I should participate but then I thought I might as well give it a try. So the rules of the contests are as following-
As many poems as possible on uniquely different themes, each beginning with the lines:
‘If you were young, and I, beautiful,
And we chanced to meet on a lonely road’
Characteristics of poems:
- No more than 20 lines
- Not more than one poem on a single theme
- Grammar & usage should be correct (some degree of poetic license allowed- my friend’s discretion)
- Spellings should be correct (some degree of poetic license allowed- my discretion)
I chose the theme as a robbery gone wrong and my entry is as following-
If you were young and I, beautiful
And we chance to meet on a lonely road,
You walking all alone with a bag so full
With me following close to rob your load.
The road stretch was dark and the moment apt
Lonely road, a young woman with a full bag; what a catch,
Lurched into the motion and towards you I leapt,
My hands on your bag and boy I snatched.
Rest of the story doesn’t go as I had planned
My exit idea to snatch run did actually fail,
When I realized my throat and your hand
A sharp push and a jerk I gave for me to bail.
So here was beautiful me who went for the kill
My life, my throat and my chain of real gold,
hanging on a thin thread of your whims and will
saved by a whisker or to the devil my soul was sold.
I ran like no tomorrow leaving behind the bag that was full
And also leaving the gold in my neck; with your grip it flowed,
Then I wonder why you were young and I, beautiful
And why do we chance to meet on a lonely road.
Ps. This is after a long time I am trying a poem with an abab rhyming scheme. Would love to hear your feedback if it actually sounded good and rhymed properly.
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Nice one!
May be few more better choice of words would have made it more colorful.. nice twist to the theme though… Keep it up
@Mohan: Thank you. I know I could have done better with the description and words but somehow got fixated. Somewhere to wrap it up in 20 lines was a factor.
the rhyme was good but I found the last poem funnier :0)
@Meera: Was it, I agree to Mohan’s comments I could have used better words.
LOL! Didn’t see that coming. Good one.
@Pallavi: Yes I played with theme.
Cool one indeed, and the last one was really cool….
@Senthilkumar: Thanks a lot.
hehe…..enjoyed it….good luck!!:)
@brocasarea: Thanks man, How r u doing man?
good one but not comparable with the previous…
@Vipul: I agree